Blog # 9 Revising

Revising my essay is actually not an easy thing to do. I already started to change paragraphs around and wording that can hinder the flow of this story. I really want this to come out great since this story really means a lot to me. I never told it fully before and it also gives myself the opportunity to get it all out without having these memories remain inside me.

First of all, I am unsure about the opening. I wanted to introduce it in a way where it wasn't so direct. The symbol in my story is the claddagh ring and from this ring comes memories of my grandmother. So I thought it would be important to mention this first. The paragraphs I wrote are either in the present time or the past and how I am able to see this same experience from different times. I think I put down all the things I would like to write about. This was a challenge for me in the beginning but the information i want to say is all out there. The only problem is, I hope it is presented in a way where it is easily understood. I want each paragraph to flow well. And I want the reader to be able to feel connected, even if it is in a small way. Maybe their own experiences came up while they read my story. I hope my writing will be able to depict an image or truth.

I tried listening to a song that that helps me remember the experiences I wrote about very well. And instead of focusing on proper wording, I just wanted to get those memories out there and then work on that. This seems to help because, otherwise, I am worrying mostly about the final outcome when I am not even close to being finished.